The Inconspicuous Exit Of Madam Rose

Ooh, I like the title. Content = loveliness. So I shall nitpick word choice ^_^

The rose turned yellow, then[Seems like an unnecessary word and almost makes this first line seem too simplistic] wore[coupled with "turned" from earlier in the line, these are bland words that could be more... significant] a grey fur
To keep her warm against condensation
Which worked from her source[I have no idea what this means] to try to[I think "and" would work better here] woo her[And now I'm a bit confused; what was wooing her?]
But merely murdered[you might want to stick a pronoun somewhere before this point to clarify who murdered the elation] their shared elation.
And still she opened her lips to heaven,[I like the petals/lips idea, but "to heaven" seems such a common phrase]
Assured of her worth, willing hope to fall,
Knowing her bearded neck wouldn’t leaven
And owning nothing but her strangled call. ["call seems like it's here to fit the rhyme rather than the line]
Her leaves pressed against her[I think the repetition of "her" sounds awkward, but I understand why it's here too...], ready to mourn
The innocent beauty’s[I almost want to say that this is vague, but it doesn't really lend itself to being expanded upon] premature death
Which made bloodied lips all the more forlorn
As she choked on regurgitated breaths. [Nice]
Such grandiose promises quickly die
And splatter themselves on the creaking sky. [I like these last two lines in and of themselves and also as an ending to the poem. And "creaking sky" is cool too]